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USERNAME: librarian Angela Library of Ruina TEXT • AUDIO • VIDEO • ACTION • OVERFLOW

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on the night of takasugi's birthday party

[hanikamu]

ayo miss ange are you like a writing desk?
coz i wanna put your right end on my front

[ malkuth can explain ]

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( hello? )

May I say something, Rinne Amagi?

[hanikamu]

yea

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Official PUL Score.
Originality: 2
Length: 3
Grammar: 1
Vocabulary: 1
Coherency: 1
Total: 8/20

It was a good effort, however there is room for improvement. Your vocabulary and grammar are both lacking, showcasing a rather simplistic approach to flirting. I acknowledge some people might appreciate that, even if I don't. The length of it was quite nice but could have been snappier. Finally, I personally feel as if you could have been clearer about what the "right end" is to you, as that also may be personal preference.

You can do better, Amagi. Try.